See, my problem is that isn't where the story lies, and in fact, in its normalcy that part of the story needs to be glossed. I don't want to unpack, and I don't want to dwell on the illness in a way, actually. Its a thing, and it's a huge thing, but it's a persistent thing until it becomes part of the background in its own way. Like, fight club. I don't want to talk about it.
This is just mah brain spouting shit here.
I don't know. i wonder when people tell me about show don't tell, I wonder why. Like, yeah, I see a lot of shitty telling writing, but. Okay, I'll be honest. whenever I see someone tell me that I SHOULDN'T do something because it's better this way, I sometimes like to say "no, it just hasn't been done well the other way yet." Believe me, I love dialogue. But every time I added dialogue to that scene, it looked like I added dialogue because I was like, "oops, I better add some stuff to break up the narrative."
I can be very fast, you are right, and crap we're in chat.
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This is just mah brain spouting shit here.
I don't know. i wonder when people tell me about show don't tell, I wonder why. Like, yeah, I see a lot of shitty telling writing, but. Okay, I'll be honest. whenever I see someone tell me that I SHOULDN'T do something because it's better this way, I sometimes like to say "no, it just hasn't been done well the other way yet." Believe me, I love dialogue. But every time I added dialogue to that scene, it looked like I added dialogue because I was like, "oops, I better add some stuff to break up the narrative."
I can be very fast, you are right, and crap we're in chat.
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